My hiding spot
“I’m ready! Come and find me.”
Mums room smells like the body-shop.
Haka will never find me in this dark room.
Be very careful that your feet aren't sticking out. The floor feels like a cat's back.
Haka will probably be searching in the bush by the tramp and in the rumpus room.
I must not sneeze or move when Haka comes tip toeing in. I can hear tip toe tip toe the door slowly opens. Haka quietly says come out come out wherever you are.
I stay dumb and still but a BIG sneeze erupted out AAA ACHOO!
Haka turns around. I stay still as a stick then Haka slowly looks under the cot. “Found you! ” Haka yells.
Great suspense for me the reader Pama as I read on and wonder if Haka will ever find you.
ReplyDeleteI wonder if you could have used a different phrase about your sneeze. Perhaps instead of it 'coming out' it could have exploded, erupted, burst out. What do you think?